Wednesday, October 9, 2013

You're 16, You're Beautiful and You're a Voter

     In the passage which written by Anya Kamenetz, as saying that teenagers could be voter as 16 years old. she believes that teenagers can rise up fast if parents treat them as adult. In addition, government should lower the laws for voting age to 16. Also, the legal age should not be fixed, it should be flexible for teenagers by practicing and educational.
    teenagers can rise up fast if parents treat them as adult. There is a example to support the author's idea, Voting is one of the way to test teenagers because they have to take the exams to get the qualify to vote, and teenagers can learn the responsibility to vote by taking the exam. Since they are taking the exams, they learn from the exam at the same time. Also, it improves teenagers brain function because they have to struggle with the questions. However,teenagers have to think in deeply and work they brain truly. This is example to show that if parents allow their kids to practice things which are adults did, teenagers will become a adults fast, and they will get knowledge more than other teenagers.

4 comments:

  1. Look at your first sentence: "In the passage which written by Anya Kamenetz, as saying that teenagers could be voter as 16 years old." Your main verb is "saying" Who is doing the saying? Can you rewrite it so this is clearer?
    Good job using cause an effect in the second paragraph.

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  2. In the passage which written by Anya Kamenetz, she states that teenagers could be voter as 16 years old.

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  3. Better! See how using the subject/verb "she states" like we discussed in class makes it a lot clearer?

    What is the difference here between "could" and "should"? Which do you think she means?

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