Sunday, October 13, 2013

teens rights

In “You’re 16, You’re Beautiful and You’re a Voter” by Anya Kamenetz, she suggests of young teen age people who are the age of 16 should have the right to vote like everyone else, are likely voting for president, mayor or someone else. She continue elaborate that the age of 16 who are working should get a credit card to show how responsible they truly are which means as adults. She argues that young people are eligible to work, drink, and to get married like getting a first time job working in McDonalds; taking people’s order in a young age shows potential in their life work as a teenager. She highly believes that people of the age of 16 are able to get their driving license which shows that they can prove they are highly responsible as adult to vote as their rights.

She clearly point out some facts that people in their teens are getting their permit test to be able eligible to get very own driver license like showing a high rate of level responsibly of taking a New York state exams in each school grade that is given to them. She also include that people in age of 16 should take the civics test which is similar to a citizenship test should able to pass the exam and able to vote. But teens should be advice about drinking alcohol tests for drinking.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Jaseline - You show a good understanding of the article here. In class we talked about how a lot of students have a problem with fragments. This is NOT your issue! You tend to go to the other side with run-ons or long sentences that are confusing. For example, look at your first one here: In “You’re 16, You’re Beautiful and You’re a Voter” by Anya Kamenetz, she suggests of young teen age people who are the age of 16 should have the right to vote like everyone else, are likely voting for president, mayor or someone else." If you end with "like everyone else" this is a very good, clear, strong first sentence! The last part introduces something new. Can you write this part as a separate sentence that introduces this new idea?

    Good work!

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